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Great read!
Death's Wages
Story No. 2 with people who hate their jobs, Story No. 3 with people who should be dead but aren't. Enjoy!

This had been banging around in my head for a month or two and I finally got it hammered into something that I liked, so here it is! If you're feeling like critique, here are a few questions:

a) Does this feel like it moves too quickly?
b) Do you think this needs more description?
c) My biggest focus in this story was revealing character through dialogue. Did the characters' dialogue give you a good feel for who they are? If not, what do you think I could do to improve it?
d) And just for fun, what do you think the narrator's gender was?
e) Anything else I could improve on?

Thanks for reading, and have an awesome day!

Update 11/22/15: EDITED with many, many thanks to IcySkittles, Rieal-Dragonsbane, DC-26, TheUnsquishedGoomba, and my dad. Seriously, thank you! :) Your feedback was really helpful in my revisions of this and it would be a weaker story without it. :)

The original draft of the story is available in my scraps here: fav.me/d9ho3tz

Oh, and just in case anyone happens to be curious, I wrote the story intending the narrator to be male.

Update 6/11/16: EEP! A DD? For me? Thank you to TheMaidenInBlack for featuring and all of you who commented or faved. I'm really glad you like this piece. You made my day! :hug:
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16x16 oil and acrylic on canvas.  Just a lot of layers.
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cogwurx Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2016  Professional Interface Designer
Thank you for the :+fav:!
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D4Dork Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2016
Thank you for the llama ^__^
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cogwurx Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2016  Professional Interface Designer
Happy Birthday! :cake:
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cogwurx Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2016  Professional Interface Designer
Thank you for the :+fav:!
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vrabiller Featured By Owner Aug 29, 2015  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
thx for the llama :*
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CastleDoor Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2015
Thank you for the llama! :)
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IsmaelHernandezArt Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2015
Thanks for the llama. You have a beautiful gallery :)
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Valentijn90 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2015
Thank you for the feedback, love your work!
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themasterofnone Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2015
thanks for the Fav! 
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DarkAngelsRhapsody Featured By Owner Aug 19, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amazingly beautiful work.
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